4) Towson's Rate of identity theft cases at 77 victims out of 100,000 people is much higher than the national level which stands at 22 cases out of 100,000 people.
5)The state Commission on Crime and Delinquency is providing $1.2 million to the Towson school district for its program Community Helping Hands to of set the recent cutbacks to educational programs.
Wednesday, February 25, 2009
Monday, February 23, 2009
lede re-writes
1. Mayor Sabrina Datolli's husband Roger Datolli, 67, was injured during a three vehicle accident Thursday afternoon.
2.Council members Sandra Gandolf and Alice Cycler raise the possibility of creating a board to oversee changes in the downtown historic district.
3. A Nevada safe haven for 77,000 tons of radioactive waste was announced at a news conference at the Department of Energy in Washington, D.C., Monday afternoon.
2.Council members Sandra Gandolf and Alice Cycler raise the possibility of creating a board to oversee changes in the downtown historic district.
3. A Nevada safe haven for 77,000 tons of radioactive waste was announced at a news conference at the Department of Energy in Washington, D.C., Monday afternoon.
Sunday, February 8, 2009
the dreaded five common grammar problems
-Punctuation: Forget the "feel good" philosophy, Don't Punctuate unless you know a rule!
comma usage: use in compound sentences, seperate elements, salutations, and introductions.
semicolons: use to connect two sentences
Example: She managed the restaurant, but he did the cooking.
-Subject & Verb agreement: Doesn't matter if its singular or plural, the subject must agree with the verb.
each, either, neither are ALWAYS singular.
Example: The Girl Scouts are a fine organization. & Neither has my vote.
-Correct Usage of Pronouns: Words like "he", "you", "they", "I", "it" stand for proper nouns.
pronouns must agree with antecedents
Example: Journalism is a popular major, and now it (journalism) prepares students for many careers.
-Sentence Structure:There are four categories
1. fragments
2. run on's
3. faulty parallelism
4. modifier placement
Example: (Wrong)- Swinging from an overhead wire, we saw a kite.
(Better)- We saw a kite swinging from an overhead wire.
-Word Usage: Correctly using words that function similarly but not identically
Example: affect/effect ( To affect is to have an effect on; effect is the noun. But effect as a verb means "bring about".)
comma usage: use in compound sentences, seperate elements, salutations, and introductions.
semicolons: use to connect two sentences
Example: She managed the restaurant, but he did the cooking.
-Subject & Verb agreement: Doesn't matter if its singular or plural, the subject must agree with the verb.
each, either, neither are ALWAYS singular.
Example: The Girl Scouts are a fine organization. & Neither has my vote.
-Correct Usage of Pronouns: Words like "he", "you", "they", "I", "it" stand for proper nouns.
pronouns must agree with antecedents
Example: Journalism is a popular major, and now it (journalism) prepares students for many careers.
-Sentence Structure:There are four categories
1. fragments
2. run on's
3. faulty parallelism
4. modifier placement
Example: (Wrong)- Swinging from an overhead wire, we saw a kite.
(Better)- We saw a kite swinging from an overhead wire.
-Word Usage: Correctly using words that function similarly but not identically
Example: affect/effect ( To affect is to have an effect on; effect is the noun. But effect as a verb means "bring about".)
chapter four
A summary lead is the opening sentence of a story; it is designed to summarize the story quickly. The book provides four tips helping to accomplish this:
I chose this lead because in 22 words the lead is able to provide the subject, location, and action of the story. It catches your attention because of word choice such as "uncommon power" and "dysfunctional" and therefore makes the reader want to continue reading.
"HEALESVILLE, Australia (AP) — Entire towns have been seared off the map by wildfires raging through southeastern Australia, burning people in their homes and cars in the deadliest blaze in the country's history."~(Baltimore Sun)
I found this lead to really draw you into the rest of the article, the fact that people were burned in their cars as they were trying to escape the blazing fire is compelling and heart wrenching.
"WHITTIER, Calif. - The mother of newborn octuplets says she had six embryos implanted in her fertility procedure -- far more than industry guidelines recommend under ordinary circumstances -- and was well aware that multiple births could result."(Baltimore Sun)
I decided this was another strong lead because the story of the woman who had recently had octuplets had been controversaly portrayed in the media and this story provided an update on previous news in the first sentence. By saying the woman was aware of the fact that she could have multiple births despite the fact that she already had 7 children at home.
- be specific as possible
- avoid backing in
- be concise
- use an active voice
I chose this lead because in 22 words the lead is able to provide the subject, location, and action of the story. It catches your attention because of word choice such as "uncommon power" and "dysfunctional" and therefore makes the reader want to continue reading.
"HEALESVILLE, Australia (AP) — Entire towns have been seared off the map by wildfires raging through southeastern Australia, burning people in their homes and cars in the deadliest blaze in the country's history."~(Baltimore Sun)
I found this lead to really draw you into the rest of the article, the fact that people were burned in their cars as they were trying to escape the blazing fire is compelling and heart wrenching.
"WHITTIER, Calif. - The mother of newborn octuplets says she had six embryos implanted in her fertility procedure -- far more than industry guidelines recommend under ordinary circumstances -- and was well aware that multiple births could result."(Baltimore Sun)
I decided this was another strong lead because the story of the woman who had recently had octuplets had been controversaly portrayed in the media and this story provided an update on previous news in the first sentence. By saying the woman was aware of the fact that she could have multiple births despite the fact that she already had 7 children at home.
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